Wow! You have really made it exciting by being sucked in. I know I wouldn’t want to be stuck in an operating system. I am wondering if you could use different punctuation rather than “…” to help show urgency. Remember short quick sentences can help an author show urgency just as well as using ” …”
WOW!A great story.I like how you have put in a cliffhanger!!Keep up the fab work!
Brendan and Emily,
Wow! You have really made it exciting by being sucked in. I know I wouldn’t want to be stuck in an operating system. I am wondering if you could use different punctuation rather than “…” to help show urgency. Remember short quick sentences can help an author show urgency just as well as using ” …”
Mrs. E (100 WC team)
Canada
I love how you put the cliffhanger and i like dave and paul well done ★
When I read this I got a huge SHOCK,I would love to hear another story of yours.
WOW!! I Love how you have thought about this really well Brendan and Emily keep up the good work!
Great work.Keep it up!!!