Hi Rachel, (That’s my daughter’s name too)!
Thank you so much for entering the 100WC, there were almost 1300 entries this week!
What I like about your writing…
Your fantastic imagination! What an interesting and imaginative story!
The range of descriptive language used to paint a picture for your readers.
What I would love to see next time…
Do you ever use -ly ending words to begin sentences? These are very effective and hook your readers immediately.
e.g.
Tirelessly, he searched…
Luckily, the kind photographer…
What do you think?
Well done and keep writing. 🙂
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team) Wirral, UK.
WOW!
I really like that story and the fact Captain Blogger is searching in a rainforest, which is our topic, is a great choice!
This was very good, I liked how it related to topic and was a story as well. Over all it was amazing I would give it 5 stars.
Thank you for your commet. I would give my story 4 stars because i got a little help .
I loved this story and it had an amazing twist .I really love it!
Hi Rachel, (That’s my daughter’s name too)!
Thank you so much for entering the 100WC, there were almost 1300 entries this week!
What I like about your writing…
Your fantastic imagination! What an interesting and imaginative story!
The range of descriptive language used to paint a picture for your readers.
What I would love to see next time…
Do you ever use -ly ending words to begin sentences? These are very effective and hook your readers immediately.
e.g.
Tirelessly, he searched…
Luckily, the kind photographer…
What do you think?
Well done and keep writing. 🙂
Mrs Tucker (100WC Team) Wirral, UK.
yes i think i should put an ly word to hook the readers mind. Thank you.